I've done this before, and have always appreciated the feedback I get from users of this site. I am a bit of an amatuer poet, as I have never taken real courses in it, and I simply write to relieve stress. Anyways I wrote this for the girl the other day, and I am just wanting some feedback. All forms of criticism are encouraged and appreciated.
here you go,
If I slept for a year,
would you come nap here beside me?
If I slept for ten years,
would you watch over me?
If I slept for one-hundred years,
would you defend me in my absence?
If I slept for a thousand years,
would you remember me?
and if I slept beside you just tonight,
would you dream of me,
like I dream of you
every night?
2007-08-24
08:17:35
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Kevin P
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