I had to write an ode to something; I chose the season, summer. I actually wrote two. Tell me which one is better and how I can improve on it. I like the second one best. =] ....I'm 14, btw and I have really bad writer's block.lol.
Here's the 1st:
Ode to summer,
You’re my favorite time of the year.~
Except when the humidity
Is too much to bear.~
When you’re around,
It’s warm enough to swim
And lay on the beach~
And bright green leaves
Cover each tree.~
I love you, summer,
When I don’t have to think twice~
About buying ice cream or water ice.~
When your time comes,
People can switch to flip-flops and shorts~
And go outside
To play their favorite sport~
I love you, summer,
Where I can show off my toes~
But one thing I hate
Is the bees and mosquitoes~
Summer, you are fun,
Amusement parks with thrill rides~
And there’s always time to go for a bike ride.~
Summer, you go too fast
August then September,~
Then, right back to the frigid winter.~
2007-07-16
16:21:25
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