Be honest please! I like creative criticism. It feels like it's missing something, but can't put my finger on it.
My Proposal
I had the same dreams last night,
Where I wake up, and everything is right,
Her lips close to me as I open my eyes,
She is here loving me without fear.
A cool wind breezes the window curtains,
Pulling the comforter up, holding her closer,
I'll care for her forever, this I am certain,
Smiling bliss, knowing we'll venture further,
She smile, and doesn't say anything.
I am sure, because she is all I know,
I need her here to love and guide me,
So I take her hand, not travelling alone.
Extending my heart and soul in my hand,
I ask her to stay, she's everything I am,
To be with me on this adventure,
My compass and my key, I need her with me.
2007-10-02
19:51:16
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