'Utopia'
There,
The not-place,
Island of ideals, paradise perfection,
Where,
In fields of gold,
Life is peace and earth is free;
There,
Pure harmony,
No suffering, and eternal youth.
Here?
The ill-place
Ideals exist, alongside us:
The destruction factor.
i'd just like your thoughts on this one - what does it make you think (first impressions)? how can i improve it? this is only a first draft, and i am reworking it as you read this line, but i am open to suggestions. =]
2007-11-27
04:10:16
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kleptomanic sheep
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