your head, and tell me what it is and what you think! thanks!
Here it is:
Dark, damp forest. Far away from the town, secluded. Leaves scattered around him, leaves, a soft bed for him to lay his weary head. Tall trees, tower over him, blocking out the sunlight.
Laying his head down, his mind can wonder. Explore into the depths, relive those memories once lost.
Lie still, my dear, and build up your strength. The past is now; the present is gone. Block out those bad times and fill up your mind with the cherished memories.
The world is yours.
2007-11-27 04:54:56 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Thanks so much you guys! I wrote this for a school newspaper, and the english teacher told me it was good but I wasn't sure.
2007-11-27 05:00:33 · update #1
Fabulous, particularly at your age.
Fabulous at any age - I am 65 and think it's really great, profound and thought-provoking.
Good luck for the future!
2007-11-27 05:08:02 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
It's a lovely poem and especially for someone so young. The imagery is very good and evokes a feeling of dreamy contentment. I think you've done a wonderful job. Keep the creative juices flowing.
2007-11-27 05:01:52 · answer #2 · answered by Sptfyr 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Wow, that was astounding
the imagery was amazing
i was definitely able to I'magine the scene
im 14, too
and i love writing things like this
except i don't write poetry really
i just try to write short stories :)
2007-11-27 05:50:34 · answer #3 · answered by kayci. 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You've got some good images in your head, if this is any example thereof. Keep writing. You'll go places, and take others with you.
2007-11-27 05:55:03 · answer #4 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you heard the panel. you go girl!!!
keep on writing and exploring the world on a whole new level- through the mind.
good use of the English language.
keep it up!!!!
2007-11-27 05:05:31 · answer #5 · answered by Lexie 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sounds like Rip Van Winkle
2007-11-27 05:01:51 · answer #6 · answered by sundsqk321@sbcglobal.net 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
its good for 14 years old
2007-11-27 04:58:15 · answer #7 · answered by Que lo what! 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is really, really good. Are you sure you're only 14? Impressive.
2007-11-27 04:58:05 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked it and felt hopeful aobut the ending
2007-11-27 04:59:02 · answer #9 · answered by David F 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Its alright, personally not my style, but hey that's just my opinion
2007-11-27 05:01:50 · answer #10 · answered by KiKo 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋