I'm a writer starting out, I'm working on my first story, I'm not so sure about the first chapter... is it any good? Or does it need a change? Thanks in advance! :)
Chapter 1.
Why me?
I wish I could zap her away--- the new girl I mean, Vanity Fanigan is such a pain. I don’t understand why she even sits with us; she smacks her gum like a cow, and talks really loud like she swallowed a microphone. I mean, just yesterday, we were all three of us in the toilet: Me, my best friend Eileen Conner and that Vanity Fanigan, she was checking herself out in the mirror, suddenly she starts screaming, “OH MY GOSH!” I thought my ears would break; but she screamed, “LINDA!” even louder, there was no one else around other than us, so I really didn’t get it, but Eileen got it; she nearly laughed herself to death. They were both laughing like crazy....
The rest of the chapter doesn't fit in here, but if you like you could check it out at http://nadine-rymes.blogspot.com
2007-01-08
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