Have you ever written something and then read it back to yourself - and, although you know what your talking about its like the words are all blank canvas's with no meaning? Thats what happened here, I wrote it, got it down on paper and then went to edit and hit a blank...
I have only ever written one or two non rhyming poems before, ever, I find it SO SO DIFFICULT to write when things dont flow and rhyme together smoothly.
Anyways, I am having a mental blank here, I cant for the life of me figure out how to make this poem better - the non rhyming thing has THROWN ME COMPLETELY.
Any tips? (first timer - be nice!)
Just The Dreamer
I’ll always be right here for you
Beside you, to care for you.
To love you - to hold you,
What else can I do?
But close my eyes and see your face
You can’t see you’re beautiful
When you’re burning so brightly
The light shining from you is blinding.
Just close my eyes and dream a little dream -
Dream a little dream of you
2007-07-30
16:08:20
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