i have written a short part to my story. and would like you to tell me if you think it's scary.
She rises up from the lake very slowly. She seems to almost look as if she is standing up above water. Sierra looked at the long-haired spirit as it twitches it’s head and lets out an eerie sound. The girl backed away in panic. The spirit turns it head as if mechanical. The hair splits open, revealing pale face in the moonlight. The eyes became bloodshot as it stares at Sierra.
“No!” Sierra cried as the spirit began to move it’s feet towards her. Dragging its feet across the dirt and grass, the spirit makes the eerie sound. Like mix of croak and crying. The spirit’s eyes looked at her as the pale face becomes more bloody instead.
Then sierra tries getting onto her feet, and starts racing to the grounds for a way out. But the only way out is through the school. The very place she did not want to return.
The spirit reaches its hand out to reach her as the cry became more frightening and ominous. Sierra ran to the school door and tries yanking it open. By the time she got it opened, the spirit’s pale face came through the darkness towards her. She slammed the door and turned.
The spirit is nowhere to be found. She slumped into the ground partly paralyzed and exhausted. She put her hands onto her face and began to shake in fear. The sound came again and she didn’t want to look. She peeked through her fingers. Her face was very close to the spirit’s. The eyes looked into her as if hypnotized. Sierra was unable to speak. The spirit vanished before her.
Sierra waited to see if the worse is to come. She looked down and saw that she is no longer in her own casual wear, but the school uniform. It was tattered and bloody. She screamed and started shaking like a leaf. She felt another presence. She looked up. A different spirit has arisen. But it’s as if she know who she is. She started saying no and shaking her head. The blonde hair spirit raised a thin knife and sliced through the air. Sierra’s scream is blood curdling and lasted through the night…
2006-09-27
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