Im writing an essay on animal with the thesis
"In society individuals are not treated equally in terms of the labor they must do, their freedom, and how they are treated".
( its teacher given so cant change anything besides the 3 prongs )
I need to know if this intro paragrph would work out so if you can read it and tell me anything thats wrong or would sound better changed. Thanks in advance for the help!
Heres the intro:
In the World today, most people do not consider themselves equal to anyone else. The truth is, nobody is equal to anyone else because everyone has some kind of skill or possession that sets them apart from everyone else. Their possessions lead them to think that they are better then others so they tend to treat them differently. Therefore, in society individuals are not treated equally in terms of the labor they must do, their freedom, and how they are treated.
2007-02-12
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