Animal farm eassay help please?

Question

Im writing an essay on animal with the thesis

"In society individuals are not treated equally in terms of the labor they must do, their freedom, and how they are treated".
( its teacher given so cant change anything besides the 3 prongs )

I need to know if this intro paragrph would work out so if you can read it and tell me anything thats wrong or would sound better changed. Thanks in advance for the help!

Heres the intro:

In the World today, most people do not consider themselves equal to anyone else. The truth is, nobody is equal to anyone else because everyone has some kind of skill or possession that sets them apart from everyone else. Their possessions lead them to think that they are better then others so they tend to treat them differently. Therefore, in society individuals are not treated equally in terms of the labor they must do, their freedom, and how they are treated.

Answer 1

It's good, but you're confusing equal with same. Two different things. All men/women are not the same, but all men are equal. However, people are not always treated equally, nor do they treat others equally. An example of that is a line from the book Animal Farm in which one character states that 'all animals are equal, but some are more equal than others'. Hope this helps.

Answer 2

Your off to a good start. As you write, just keep checking everything over. Read it outloud because that's how I find mistakes on my papers. Ask your friends to read over your paper. It's easier for people to see other people's mistakes then their own. Oh ya, here are some suggestions:
Don't make world capitalized.
The first and second sentences contradict each other. You just said that most people do not consider themselves equal to anyone else. Then you say that THE TRUTH is that nobody is equal to anyone else because... blah blah blah, the point is that you need to fix the first sentence or something.

Other then that, sounds good.