My whole life I hated roller coasters and pretty much any ride with twists, turns, loops, and drops at high, fast speeds. I even hate the ladybug roller coaster in City Park. Having only been on it three times, it remains as the only roller coaster I have ever ridden, but over this past summer, my parents decided to take me, my little sister Brianne, and my cousin Michelle, who is my age, to Disney World for my graduation. On this trip, I decided to conquer a ride much scarier than a roller coaster: The Twilight Zone Tower of Terror in Disney’s MGM Studios.
Do I need a comma after life in the first sentence? Do I need to change the tenses of my verbs to past tense, such as in the second sentence the word 'hate' to 'hated.' Is the third sentence too confusing or should I split it into two sentences? Thanks!
2007-09-15
15:39:53
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