hi im 13 n i have 2 fill out a high school application. for part of it, i have to make an essay on why we want to go there.
this is my beginning. is it good, and how would you redo it if it is bad? i showed my dad..and he thinks its not that good lol.
can someone write ideas or tell me how i can redo sentences and what more can i add?
THANKS!
Everyone has a dream. A dream to own a successful, prosperous identity in life. For most of us, the red-signal starts there, and our journey halts - shattering our ambitions to pieces. Being pensive is not what can bring us close to our goal, it’s the hard work we do, and the perseverance we bring out. The backbone of our achievements is knowledge, and to what extent we can use it. I am very confident that Wilmington Charter this school a field of intelligence, and improve my abilities in an effective, progressive manner.
2007-10-12
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