I need some constructive criticism.
Please tell me what you think of my poem.
If you like, star it,
but if u don't like it, tell me where I can fix it,
I will give best answer to most honest person.
Where No One is Alone
The wind sang through the midday sky,
The sun displayed delight.
Some birds began to mingle with,
The clouds intriguing white.
Twirling leaves drifted on the air,
The grass began to shift.
A sharp aroma filled the trees,
My breath began to drift.
I could not understand why I,
Never knew of such peace.
For just a single moment my,
Troubles commenced to cease.
A world of awe was all around,
Brilliant bliss consumed.
Nature was frozen long ago
But for me it resumed.
Blooming flowers, and stunning life,
Can shape a place unknown.
It’s safe to know that there’s a
Where no one is alone.
2007-03-24
12:39:17
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