I need help coming up with a thesis statement. I have an idea of what I want to write but not sure how to word it. My subject is on Jackie Robinson's accomplishments. I can't use any generic words or titles such as "great accomplishment, etc." My thesis statement is:
Jackie Robinsons tremendous conrtibution of breaking the color barrier was a great accomplishment as he did not only stand up to threats, but also began to establish the idea that segregation was immoral and that African Americans were just as equivilent as white people, and proved that equality among races is essentail to life as it allows for equal opportunities and advancement in history.
ok, so , the mistakes in here are: Great accomplishemnt = Generic title.
and This part:
and that African Americans were just as equivilent as white people
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as it allows for equal opportunities and advancement in history
should be used in the body paragraphs.
2007-03-04
08:38:42
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