I made a poem once in fifth grade for a school project, and I thought it was pretty good, please tell me what you think of it.
On the night of September 11,
A plane crashed into the Twin Towers.
Where thousand of people worked,
We all feared the terrorists powers.
I wanted to cry when I thought about it,
As I sat in my house sad and scared.
While I watched it onfold on TV,
I felt something run down my face-a tear.
And though I knew no one there,
I felt a great loss.
When I thought about the families,
Their luck gone bad,
I could feel their longing,
for what they once had.
What's good, what's bad, what doesn't make sense? Give some CONSTRUCTIVE critisism please!
2007-10-10
10:32:32
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