and don't worry, i'm not fishing for compliments. It's just, i wrote this poem, and i really don't like it. It's one of my worst, i've had much better. But, i figured that since i post all my other work, and since everything someone writes isn't always gonna be great, i'm gonna post this sucky poem. So here it is: (no title)
Tears streaming down my face,
only tear-staining my pale cheeks.
Tears match the pouring rain,
that lives just beyond my window.
Staring through the clear glass,
contemplating if he'll return,
but I strongly doubt it.
That vivid memory does nothing,
but play in my weak mind,
over and over again.
Shiny keys in his hands,
shouts being lashed out at my mom,
beseeching him to stay,
as her uncontrollable tears run.
But he can't take her sobs,
his hand lashes out once more,
knocking her to the floor.
This saddening video,
is the one that haunts me.
It took place on a rainy day,
just like this one.
So maybe, he'll really return.
(also, PLEASE answer my other question that’s, “Does this poem make you think?” or something close to that…just click on my avatar… plz.. thank you!)
2007-05-26
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