I just wrote another poem, or song if you wanna call it that.
Its been a long time since weve talked last,
Im tired of thinking of the past,
Being good to you is one thing I know best,
Just sit there and talk to me and Ill do the rest,
You know ill do anything for you,
I'll do anything just to be with you,
I wanna be with you forever,
Without you I cant last,
Im tired of thinking about the past,
Starting over will be the best,
Without you my hearts in a cast,
Just sit and talk to me and I'll do the rest,
Its been a long time since weve talked last,
I miss saying "I love you",
Im tired of the past,
Lets move on to the future of me and you,
Being good to you is what I know best,
I wanna be with you forever,
Just sit sit right there and ill do the rest
2007-05-26 12:12:15 · 31 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
yea beautiful poem
2007-05-26 12:14:48 · answer #1 · answered by micho 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Well, I'd get into that rhyme and meter stuff, but I don't want to bore you with that. I think it's pretty good besides the fact that every poem or song a person puts on here is about love or breaking up, and not anything else. One thing, though. If you're trying to impress a girl or something, the "Without you I can't last," line needs to be changed. Chances are, the girl won't really pay any attention to detail and they won't notice that line. But if they pay attention to everything, that line needs to be changed, because it gives them a sense of feeling trapped, like they always have to be there to take care of you. You have to have a sense of independence in this, because in reality, you could live without them. It'd be hard, but it'd still be possible.
Sorry, I kind of just went off on that line....but I just had to.
2007-05-26 19:18:04 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah. I like it but it sounds familiar. Have you seen my stuff yet?
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2007-05-26 19:16:17 · answer #3 · answered by Meatball ;) 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it You are very good and have a lot of talent. Lets have some more . I love poetry
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2007-06-03 14:27:55 · answer #4 · answered by julia g 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
whoah dude... thats like.. totally deep. lol, i LOVE it. you should make that into a song maybe. but dont get a guy to sing it. i dont like it when guys sing love songs :S lol, all the best ;)
2007-05-26 19:28:07 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice poem, but if your my ex get on down the street it aint going to happen.
2007-05-26 19:18:37 · answer #6 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's so beautiful,You are a true poet! here's a star.
2007-06-03 17:51:24 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
touching! i like it!! u should send it in to a poetry contest and mayb get it published! i had mine published! its a really awesome feeling!
2007-06-03 14:15:24 · answer #8 · answered by vbgurl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it. Your really great at poetry!!!!1 You could go pro!!!
2007-06-03 16:31:42 · answer #9 · answered by Summer400 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's good
2007-06-03 14:18:11 · answer #10 · answered by Lorelai 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋