Crappy poem???

Question

and don't worry, i'm not fishing for compliments. It's just, i wrote this poem, and i really don't like it. It's one of my worst, i've had much better. But, i figured that since i post all my other work, and since everything someone writes isn't always gonna be great, i'm gonna post this sucky poem. So here it is: (no title)

Tears streaming down my face,
only tear-staining my pale cheeks.
Tears match the pouring rain,
that lives just beyond my window.
Staring through the clear glass,
contemplating if he'll return,
but I strongly doubt it.
That vivid memory does nothing,
but play in my weak mind,
over and over again.

Shiny keys in his hands,
shouts being lashed out at my mom,
beseeching him to stay,
as her uncontrollable tears run.
But he can't take her sobs,
his hand lashes out once more,
knocking her to the floor.
This saddening video,
is the one that haunts me.
It took place on a rainy day,
just like this one.
So maybe, he'll really return.

(also, PLEASE answer my other question that’s, “Does this poem make you think?” or something close to that…just click on my avatar… plz.. thank you!)

Answer 1

If you don't like it, throw it. That's always been my way. It's my poem, my poetry, it has to please me.

There's no reason to post all of your poetry here in the 1st place, as long as your happy with, don't care what anyone else thinks. Because if you do, that's a bad sign. It's means your not living for you, for what you want, for you like.

Don't be like that... The approval you need comes from your parents and your loved ones. ...That's all I have to say...

Answer 2

I think you're just being modest, the poem's quite good in my view.
Reads like the rain brings memories of this violent man who used to physically assault and "lashed out at my mom,/beseeching him to stay,/as her uncontrollable tears run." Was that dad or other fly-by-night loser? It'd be better if he stays away although this rainy day brings the concern that "maybe, he'll really return."

Answer 3

I actually don't think it's crappy at all. I think it's pretty good. It is dark, has meaning, good style and sends a message I think that many people relate to.

Answer 4

Classical Forms of Poetry


1.) Ballad—Combination of narrative and lyrical poetry.
Form: a-a-b-b-c-c-d-d

2.) Ballade—Three stanzas of eight lines & an envoy of four lines.
Form: a-b-a-b-b-c-b-c / b-c-b-c

3.) Chant Royal—Five stanzas of eleven lines & an envoy of five lines.
Form: a-b-a-b-c-c-d-d-e-d-e / d-d-e-d-e

4.) Blank Verse—No rhyme, no set length, no set meter.

5.) Couplet—Two lines.
Form: a-a

6.) Triplet—Three lines.
Form: a-a-a


7.) Quatrain—A four line stanza.
Form: a-b-a-b

8.) Limerick—Just one, five line stanza.
Form: a-a-b-b-a

9.) Rondeau—Thirteen lines, with eight syllables in each line, three stanzas and two refrains.
Form: X =Refrain a-a-b-b-a / a-a-b-X / a-a-b-b-a-X

10.) Triolet—Single stanza of eight lines.
Form: A-B-a-A-a-b-A-B

11.) Rondel—Three stanzas with thirteen lines total.
Form: A-B-b-a / a-b-A-B / a-b-b-a-A

12.) Septet—A seven line stanza.
Form: a-b-a-b-b-c-c

13.) Sonnet—Three basic forms:
A.) Petrarchan-- a-b-b-a-a-b-b-a
B.) Shakespearean-- a-b-a-b-c-d-c-d / e-f-e-f-a-a
C.) Miltonic-- a-b-b-a-a-b-b-a-c-d-e-c-d-e

14.) Terza Rima—Three line stanzas with eleven syllables in each.
Form: a-b-a / b-c-b / c-d-c / d-e-d / e-f-e / etc……….