in this paragraph i am discribing a picture.... can u guys help me with grammar PLEASE!! i dont know, but when i read it, it doesnt sound good to me... please!
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This celebration is famous for its colorful and cultural parades. People celebrate with a huge carnival that includes parades, shows, and parties. In this picture, we can see that this street is packed with people of all ages in colorful costumes. A float is passing by, carrying men in costumes and masks. At the back of the float, there are people marching and dancing at the same time, which gets the crowd’s attention. The crowd is waving at the people in the float, and it seems that there is a lot of security around the place, but it did not stop the people from having a terrific time. In addition, the weather was on their side, because it was sunny and clear, just perfect for the occasion.
2007-02-11
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