Okay, I am going to post an introductory paragraph I wrote. If it sucks please give me some useful tips on improving it. (or reword it, whatever you feel like) Oh, and does it "excite" you about the further paragraphs?
Oh, and are you supposed to include your three supporting points in your introductory paragraph or not. This essay has to be 600 words, and I had to keep chopping my intro down because it was like 120 words....
here it is
"Many would agree that America is the greatest Nation in the world. It is home of the brave, the beautiful, and most importantly the free. Recently, the United States has invaded the country of Iraq, and among others things, has expressed its goal in stabilizing Iraq and establishing a Democratic form of government. Realistically, a lasting Democracy in Iraq is not a realistic feat for Americans.
2007-09-29
14:44:21
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