Let me start off by saying its kind of a sad, emo-ish poem/song with no background. The situation inferred in it has no relation to any event in my life. Its just... emo. I don't normally write this kind of stuff! It just kinda fell into my head, and I like it. Will you suggest improvement? Or, perhaps, another stanza? :3
Here it is:
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I saw you lying there, gasping
for air. So I kneeled next to
you, and you said to me,
"I can't hold on anymore."
Please don't leave me,
you are not alone.
Please breathe!
I need you next to me;
I can't let you go-
Another sad song written,
another heart beat fading,
another life gone wrong!
Please breathe:
Come back towards my light,
see the tears I cry,
come back to me~
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Your thoughts?
2007-09-15
13:16:22
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Mary
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