Can someone plz help me to maybe cut out some unnecesarry things...and summarize a few sentences...because i cant think of any at the moment...thanks!
Rachel’s Rise in Position
As morning dawned upon the dry, cracked ground, the sky unfolded to reveal the sun’s radiant beams, emitting their brilliant flames across the vast horizon. The golden sky awoke, spreading a faint smile across her face. Prickly branches shot forth their naked spokes into the misty air, as if they raised up their cries for rain. There I stood beside the window of my bedroom, as I gazed at the small bush my dad had planted for me. He’d always told me to take care of it, but he would never tell me again. A woman who had too much drink had crashed into my dad’s car, killing him instantly. A tear of sorrow trickled down my cheek, but I brushed it away.
“Mom,” my younger sister’s petulant voice echoed from the other room, “where are you, Mom?”
“I’m here,” I heard her answer.
2007-06-16
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