What do you think of my story so far? feel free 2 critique, its a school assignment: As I watched the sand swirl across the dusty horizon I remembered that horrifying day and could only think, it all happened so fast. One cold October morning, I remembered, everyone was jogging around the school. Taking the lead, my breathing turned heavy. All of a sudden gunshots sounded in the distance, my breathing turned spastic. Things like this didn’t happen in a small town like Marine City, Michigan, but today was different. All over the country this was happening, in every small town, no one was safe. Gunshots sounded closer and closer, joggers at the back of the line began to fall. Realizing the shots were much to close to outrun, I quickly dove behind under a nearby bridge. I remember holding my breath as the men with guns charged past they bridge yelling in a strange language and pointing feverishly. I remember being terribly afraid and alone under that bridge, but at the same time that brid
2006-11-12
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