I am so hesitant and I need your opinions. Tell me what you think and what I should improve.
(suposed to be a satire.)
__________________________________________Late on a balmy summer's evening, a few hours before the events that led to the total eradication of man kind began, I arrived at the city of Lundda. Word has it that this was the greatest city in the world.
That night I was quite happy with the way everything went. The city wasn't as costly as I had expected and I managed to taste some of its legendary joys. That included feverish sex with one of those famous Lunddan prostitutes and getting drunk on the finest spirits I'd ever tasted. I went to bed utterly satisfied with the way things were going. As I laid my head on the pillow I revised my plans for the next day. I would wake up early, have a quick breakfast, pay the innkeeper, then go searching for the city's best breeder from whom I would buy a couple of blue hairy beasts, healthy male and female capable of mating---
2006-12-27
01:07:09
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