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War
Charge, they cry with guns blazing
Kill them all you hear them saying
Storming towards the enemy lines
These are bloody and violent times
No mans land is littered with dead
No arms no legs and even no head
Some are still alive and writhe in pain
Running past trying to pass the blame
They shot our lads they must pay
None of them must live another day
Sounds of gunshot rebound all around
The horrible smell of war and its sound
Pain attacks the chest, you start to fall
Medic! You scream, please hear my call
I cannot die this blackest day come rescue me
Oh lord in heaven let them hear my plea
Darkness invades into your terrified eyes
Thinking of whom you would say goodbyes
Will they miss me? Will they know?
To heaven or hell will my soul go?
2007-02-05
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