Lost in my mind
Lost in my mind
Lost in my soul
Lost until the very tips of my toes
What was once in time is now in past
Living each day as if it were my last...
I cry for you like no tomorrow
Wearing it on my sleeves this pain inflicted..sorrow
I wish i could go back..back to yesterday..
Back to the day it all began...
I wanna erase it all...
Even that very first call...
You sounded like an angel...
Or maybe even a goddess..
Now i simply cant lay my mind to rest..
But, All in all...i cant seem to forget...
Forget the words exchanged...
Forget the feeling that was once felt..
Anytime your mouth opened my heart seemed to melt..
But melt...
Has now turned into a long gloomy road of
DISCONSOLATE......
2007-12-18 12:38:58 · 4 answers · asked by oakens123 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i loved it!- but maybe work on that closing line a little more. based on the rest of the poem, u can do better.
but other than that, it's really gooD!!
2007-12-18 12:44:33 · answer #1 · answered by person 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You sound depressed, about a girl.
I enjoyed the poem though.
2007-12-18 20:46:11 · answer #2 · answered by LivGirlxo 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i enjoyed it =D
2007-12-18 20:43:02 · answer #3 · answered by peachie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok.
2007-12-18 20:42:49 · answer #4 · answered by MadforMAC 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋