What do you think of this poem? I'm 13 years old do you think I'm talented?

Question

Love is like a wave,
it comes and it goes,
but when i look at you and me,
ours is like a rose,
so young,
so elegant,
so beautiful,
and so true,
i guess what i'm saying is...
I LOVE YOU!!

i wrote it thinking about it a girl i was inlove with (my first love) but one day she found out b/c i was stupid and told some1 over myspace and that person printed out what i said and showed the girl & the whole skool. then the girl got freaked out and said she hated me and when i tried to text her and say i was sorry she said "stop callin and textin my phone. you get on my last nerve. get da point? so i have to spell it out for you? just stay out my life! i hate you!" and i started cryin. well it's been 9 months scence i wrote that poem and 7 months scence the girl found out and im still not over her so i knoi loved her...and i also kno b/c aftr all dat i would still die for her..but what do you think of the poem?

it was my first one and ive written better...this was when i FIRST found out i had a lil talent

im not a BOY!! IM BI SEXUAL!!!

Answer 1

I think it's a beautiful poem. Try not to become so obsessed with others yet though, you have plenty of time for love, take it slow.

Answer 2

The poem is typical of someone your age. It is a wonderful start - you need to read lots of poetry - especially by the classic poets like Elizabeth Barrett Browning, Robert Browning, Henry David Thoreau, Edgar Allen Poe, even Shakespeare - check out their techniques. Then come up with your own style. Never say in a poem exactly what you mean - use metaphors, similes, etc. to suggest your theme. Keep trying - whether or not you end up having a natural talent for it or not remains to be seen - but you have a fantastic interest in it and that's what counts right now.

P.S. Dump the zero and find yourself a hero!

Answer 3

The poem is very sweet, but it strikes me as quite trite. In fact, this is something I would call "verse", rather than poetry. I like your sense of rhythm, though, and I think that if you build on that and worry less about trying to make the poem turn out like previous poems you've read, you might write some great poetry. Like all good things, good poetry takes practice. Keep writing now, and you might be a great poet someday. Or at least you'll get pleasure out of creating art.

Try reading some well-respected poets. There are many styles of poetry out there and you might find some examples that you like.

Keep it up!

Answer 4

It a sweet poem. One word of advice never say you will die for someone else unless they are willing to do the same for you, value your life and yourself, don't worry about this girl in time you will find someone much better who is better suited for you who will love the poems you write for her. I think the reason she reacted that was cos she was affraid that everyone found out about your relationship and it scared her and maybe embasessed her. I don't think deep down she hates you, try and stay away from her and respect her wishes. Keep writing as I'm sure this will help you heal. Good luck.

Answer 5

i think of that's good. in case you somewhat appreciate poetry you need to save writing. the ask your self approximately poetry is that that's YOURS. It portrays the way you sense and what you opt to assert. no person can inform you that that's undesirable or inadequate. this is all you. whether that's what you needed to assert then you definately did it! I used to jot down lots that's extremely healthy so which you will do. in case you like poetry you additionally should verify others because it may desire to motivate you in distinctive instructions and categories.

Answer 6

It's a sweet poem. Its simple, but it really illustrates what your love meant to you. I like how you give one analogy for love, but a different one for yourself. Everyone's love is different, so its cool that you have different things to relate it too. I also liked the parallel structure of so elegant, so beautiful, so true. I would recommend though that you explore more complicated poetry, I bet you would really excel at that! The best way to find what your good at is by trying everything. While your really good at these simpler poems, you may find that you totally dominate at some other type!

Answer 7

I love the poem. But I still can't get over the fact that your a leasbian or are you just a guy? Yeah if your a lesbian, then I don't really think you liking the girl is real "love"

Answer 8

Very intelligent in poetry.However to be truthful.Ask your parents please youth to see if I am right.You can not should not yet understand love.It is a very difficult choice.Life is your choice at this point in your young life.Educate yourself and make money.Then you encourage her to put school first.Then you can be a doc,lawyer,or political leader aiming to raise the american flag 1 inch!Stand for something or yuul fall fer something.

Answer 9

a 13 year old does not know what love is. Period. What you are feeling is infatuation, but you won't really realize that till you get older. You'll probably ignore me on this, but you'll see. Keep workin on your poetry, you've got a lot of years to perfect it.

Answer 10

the poem is very nice, maybe now you can find a better girl to write a poem for.