its a diary entry i wrote from "the necklace" its about a journal entry from the wife of madame loisel, did i do a good job, if u see some errors or ways i could make it better
PLEASE TELL
I have put up with my wife for too long. When I first met her, she was the sweetest and petite you lady I had never seen. But I should have known that, “You can’t judge a book by its cover.” In less than a month her smile turned to a frown and she started complaining. It started from “We eat the same thing everyday” to “Our apartment is so shabby” to “you don’t deserve me” and finally the heartbreaker “I belong to a high class family!” My only escape was my job as a clerk, which I’d work from sunup to sundown to satisfy my selfish wife. At home I tried to be the loving husband, but inside my anger was ready to burst out. Then the day came where I was informed I could get an invitation to a ball. I decided to get my hands on one for my wife, because despite her selfishness she was still my wife, and I was still her husband.
That day I came home, tired and stressed but excited. I was excited because I was holding a golden ticket that might bring the misery in this relationship to an end. But I should have known that even a priceless invitation to a ball wouldn’t please my self-centered wife. As I was explaining to her the things, I had done to obtain this invitation, she interrupted me and told me she would not go! I was utterly speechless! What kind of lady would disown this kind of offer!? Impossible! Suddenly she retorted, “I don’t have a dress, I will not go.” I swear on my only handkerchief that she had any dresses. “The one you wear to the theater is quite fine, I think” I answered as nicely as I could. She walked away and I could see tears from the side of her cheek. She married a clerk, for god’s sake, not the King of England! What did she expect! As I could not bear to see tears, I gave her some of the money to buy a dress. I had saved up this money to go shooting with some friends but that would have to wait. Why I gave her some of the money, I don’t know. I now regret giving the money to her, regret it all. The next problem was that my wife didn’t have jewelry, but thankfully she resolved that problem by borrowing a quite beautiful diamond necklace from one of her friends. The night of the ball came and my wife stood out like a red apple among green apples. She was dazzling and the diamond necklace made everything perfect. I even saw her smile. Things were perfect once again. That night when we got home I heard a scream from my wife’s room. As I ran to her I became very puzzled, “What’s wrong?” I asked. “I don’t have the diamond necklace I borrowed...” she stammered. It can’t be I kept repeating, the necklace looked so expensive, it must be somewhere! But that $360,000 was never found.
2007-10-11 15:36:37 · 6 answers · asked by مدينا Medina ☪ 6 in Society & Culture ➔ Etiquette
OH MY GOD PEOPLE, SHE NEEDED IT PROOF READ, SHE DIDN'T ASK ANYONE TO DO IT FOR HER!!! MAYBE HER PROOFER IS MESSED UP. THIS IS HELPING NOT DOING!!!
You did good, as far as spelling there wasn't much wrong. I erased a couple words that didn't work.
I ran mine and this is the result.
Not sure about Loisel or Loise?
its a diary entry i wrote from "the necklace" its about a journal entry from The Wife of Madame Loisel, did i do a good job, if u see some errors or ways i could make it better
PLEASE TELL
I have put up with my wife for too long. When I first met her, she was the sweetest and petite lady I had ever seen. But I should have known that, “You can’t judge a book by its cover.” In less than a month her smile turned to a frown and she started complaining. It started from “We eat the same thing everyday” to “Our apartment is so shabby” to “you don’t deserve me” and finally the heart breaker “I belong to a high class family!” My only escape was my job as a clerk, which I’d work from sunup to sundown to satisfy my selfish wife. At home I tried to be the loving husband, but inside my anger was ready to burst out. Then the day came where I was informed I could get an invitation to a ball. I decided to get my hands on one for my wife, because despite her selfishness she was still my wife, and I was still her husband.
That day I came home tired and stressed but excited. I was excited because I was holding a golden ticket that might bring the misery in this relationship to an end. But I should have known that even a priceless invitation to a ball would not’ please my self-centered wife. As I was explaining to her the things, I had done to obtain this invitation, she interrupted me and told me she would not go! I was utterly speechless! What kind of lady would disown this kind of offer!? Impossible! Suddenly she retorted, “I don’t have a dress, I will not go.” I swear on my only handkerchief that she had dresses. “The one you wore to the theater is quite fine, I think” I answered as nicely as I could. She walked away and I could see tears from the side of her cheek. She married a clerk, for god’s sake, not the King of England! What did she expect! As I could not bear to see tears, I gave her some of the money to buy a dress. I had saved up this money to go shooting with some friends but that would have to wait. Why I gave her the money, I don’t know. I now regret giving the money to her, regret it all. The next problem was that my wife did not have jewelry, but thankfully she resolved that problem by borrowing a quite beautiful diamond necklace from one of her friends. The night of the ball came and my wife stood out like a red apple among green apples. She was dazzling and the diamond necklace made everything perfect. I even saw her smile. Things were perfect once again. That night when we got home I heard a scream from my wife’s room. As I ran to her I became very puzzled, “What’s wrong?” I asked. “I don’t have the diamond necklace I borrowed...” she stammered. It can’t be I kept repeating, the necklace looked so expensive, it must be somewhere! But that $360,000 was never found.
2007-10-11 15:40:06 · answer #1 · answered by char__c is a good cooker 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
"I swear on my only handkerchief that she had any dresses." That line doesn't make sense, but it's probably just a typo.
Other than that minor point, I think you did a really good job!
2007-10-11 15:44:50 · answer #2 · answered by Rachael F 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Too hard to read. Have you ever heard of writing in paragraphs?
2007-10-11 15:53:18 · answer #3 · answered by Cat Lover 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
"When I first met her, she was the sweetest and petite you lady I had never seen." change 'you' lady to young lady.
My attention span isn't long enough to do more, sorry.
2007-10-11 15:51:08 · answer #4 · answered by cme 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
this is homework HELP not homework DO
2007-10-11 15:38:41 · answer #5 · answered by nope 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
DO IT YOURSELF!!!
ANYONE WHO HELPS U IS CHEATING WHICH IS BAD!!!
2007-10-11 15:41:46 · answer #6 · answered by speechgirl2013 2 · 0⤊ 4⤋