Help do I need to dumb this down?

Question

I have to write a letter to an author (pretend) for an assignment that needs to include 10 question...I need help editing...is it too wordy I'm iin jr.high

I have read your book The Giver twice in the past couple of years; it is such an original book that poses more questions than it answers. That is probably why so many people like this book, because it makes you think. I still haven’t fully grasped how someone could pull such a far-fetched version of real life out of thin air, how did you come up with the story? Did you get ideas from the world today by exaggerating real life concepts? The reason I like the book is the way you can connect to the characters, how did you come up with them? I especial like Asher, out of all of the characters in the book it seems like he is most like a “normal” person in present time, making lots of mistakes, did you base his or any other characters personalities off of anyone you know? The story takes place in a very controlled environment, does that have a deeper mean then portrayed, hypothetically do you think this sort of thing will ever happen in the far future to some extent?

Well, I think you’re a great author and I have read some of your other books, who inspires you to write them? If no one in particular inspires you, what authors do you look up to in past and present time? I know that a lot of authors that people look up to have devoted so much had work and time in to writing through out their lives. Did you always know you were going to be a writer; were your parents and teachers supportive if you were interested in writing at a young age? These are just some of the questions that come to mind when reading your books, I guess it shows that you’re a very good author!

I have asked this question before and people are like there are too many questions..well if you really wanted to help you would have read the who thing and known

Answer 1

Maybe a few too many compliments, and always eliminate unnecessary words. Your sentence structure is a little choppy, but for Jr high, you're doing great. Just remember that it is better to have a long sentence than several short choppy ones. Also, the key to great writing is to make your words flow. Start with one question/statement, then place the one that is most closely related in subject matter, and continue that throughout the document. Oh, and don't forget to summarize at the end (yes, even letters need a summary).

Answer 2

I think it's very well written for someone in junior high. Of course you will want to do spell check and take out the word "lots", use a lot instead.

Answer 3

You have too many sentences running together where they need to stand alone and be punctuated as such.

Answer 4

I don't think it's too "wordy" the questions just jump out at you.

Answer 5

Yes its very nerdy! no jk... its well written and you should ace the assignment

Answer 6

Your teacher will like it just fine as it is. Don't "Dumb it down" or he/she will know it's not your best work.