Jenny is a 22-year-old from New York City. She's 5' 7" and 104 lbs. She has been modeling and acting for almost 2 years now. She has accomplished a lot in this last year and look foward to fulfilling the rest of her dreams as time goes on. She has done a lot of print work as well as T.V work; and enjoy them equally. She's looking to work with new people and expand her porfolio. Jenny was featured in the music video of "BLANK" by the artist BLANK.
2007-09-28 01:48:01 · 6 answers · asked by mbw m 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
Jenny is a 22-year-old from New York City. She's 5' 7" and weighs 104 lbs. She has been modeling and acting for almost two years now. She has accomplished much in this last year and looks forward to fulfilling the rest of her dreams as she pursues her career. She has done a lot of *print work as well as *television work and enjoys them equally. She looks forward to work with new people and expand her porfolio. Jenny was featured in the music video "BLANK" by the artist BLANK.
Note: "Print work" and "television work" needs to be defined.
2007-09-28 02:02:13 · answer #1 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Jenny is a 22-year-old from New York City. At 5' 7" and 104 lbs, she has been modeling and acting for almost 2 years now. She has accomplished a lot in this last year and is looking foward to fulfilling the rest of her dreams as time goes on. She has done a lot of print and T.V work, enjoying them equally. Most recently, she was featured in the music video of "BLANK" by the artist BLANK. Jenny is looking foward to working with new people and expanding her impressive porfolio.
Take a look at this and tell me what you think?
2007-09-28 08:59:04 · answer #2 · answered by saleenboy27 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nicely written, only 2 corrections needed as I've added an "s" on 2 words. I deleted the word "work" next to TV since it sounds redundant.
She has accomplished a lot in this last year and looks forward to fulfilling the rest of her dreams as time goes on. She has done a lot of print work as well as TV, and enjoys them equally.
2007-09-28 09:04:38 · answer #3 · answered by crazy4wordracer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First of all, you would say:
" looks forward to fufilling her dreams”
Also don't forget the s in this phrase as well:
" and enjoys them equally"
Also you don't necessarily put an of in the phrase,
“ In the music video of 'Blank"
You might also want to consider rewording that paragraph for more coherency.
2007-09-28 09:01:04 · answer #4 · answered by farahspell_123 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In the fourth line, the word "enjoy" should be replaced with "enjoys."
:)
2007-09-28 08:56:35 · answer #5 · answered by Charity H 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"and LOOKS forward" "print work, as well as" "enjoyS them equally"
2007-09-28 08:57:24 · answer #6 · answered by flossiedots 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋