SMALL TALK
I talk.
You talk.
We talk.
We're pleased.
He talks.
She talks.
They talk.
They're pleased.
Do you ever get the feeling
that not enough people listen?
(Yes, I wrote this stupid thing.)
2007-09-23 11:23:31 · 9 answers · asked by Doc Watson 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Claire, each of the first eight lines has exactly two syllables. To change 'they're' to 'they are' or 'we're to 'we are' would break the flow.
2007-09-25 20:30:53 · update #1
I agree with you. If only we would listen.......
It applies beautifully to this question posted on Y&A;
If only they would listen.........
Do you think it was childish for U.S. delegation to walk out of the UN when Iran pres. spoke?
The answers to this are posted below;
http://ca.answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AinjBLI3h1PO0vIbtv47cM7BFQx.;_ylv=3?qid=20070925192700AAzrr6b
2007-09-25 17:03:28 · answer #1 · answered by Soundproof 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Oh this wasteland needs some rain and it form of feels that clouds are back back, yet they get sucked up into an incredible enormous gadget so wealthy human beings could have ingesting water it rather is sparkling.
2016-10-05 06:00:42 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Doc Wat, (Suggested new handle to express most abundantly your newly honed 'precis prowess')
If your objective is to achieve minimalism as succinctly as humanly possible WITHOUT resorting to various crimes of verbosity and other assorted grandiose misdemeanors of rampant literary spewage, I'd swear... you've got it.
Yet as I wax poetically and wane intellectually, I do digress.
If you please, allow me to quote Mr. B. Shakespeare who once wrote the following (which is mostly from memory so not necessarily verbatim):
"To expostulate why day is day and night is night
and time is time
Is to waste day, night and time itself...
Therefore, since brevity is the soul of wit,
And tediousness the limbs and outward flourishes,
I shall be brief."
(And I bet you were thinking I'd use the "one mouth & two ears" quote, didn't you?)
AND! (bet you thought I'd FINALLY stop... I promise this is IT now) for your listening pleasure, here is an appropriate musical interlude in keeping with your Spartan Prose Period:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JwIddYGse9g
p.s. I'd change "We're pleased and They're pleased to We ARE pleased and They ARE pleased.... just
edit: I offered my suggestion (at the very end, to subdue any feelings of imposition that my words may unintentionally stir for you) as I thought the change in emphasis might empower your poem's message. As it should be, what & how you are moved to write remains always sacredly in the domain of your own personal creative license.
:-) It is my wish to share the generosity of feelings expressed by your writings and to offer you enjoyment in the light hearted tone of my post to you.
2007-09-25 16:11:45 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Cute.
2007-09-23 13:56:11 · answer #4 · answered by 2bzy 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would say that yes, there are not enough People listening to your Charade.
2007-09-23 11:30:05 · answer #5 · answered by a.vasquez7413@sbcglobal.net 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I'm sorry, what did you say?
Oh, the poem. Yeah. Oh, you're right, it's worthless.
Now, as I was saying...
2007-09-23 11:49:48 · answer #6 · answered by The Babe is Armed! 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Well done! (Now that's small talk!)
2007-09-25 02:05:57 · answer #7 · answered by bailingwirewillfixit 3 · 3⤊ 0⤋
:-) Yes, I get that feeling.
2007-09-23 15:44:15 · answer #8 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
i feel ya
2007-09-28 18:05:34 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋