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SKILLS SUMMARY

• Excellent verbal and written communication skills obtained from two years of experience as an Interviewer and a Sales Representative
• Organizational and time management skills acquired from two years of experience as a Librarian
• Outstanding teamwork and leadership skills developed through two years of experience as a Coach and a Captain of a floor hockey team
• Acknowledged for positive attitude towards learning and diligence in completing assignments

TECHNICAL SKILLS

Familiar with AutoCAD 2007, Autodesk Inventor 11, Solid Edge V12, ProDESKTOP, QuickCAM Pro Advanced Milling, MasterCam X2, and, 3D and 4D CNC Machining
• In-depth knowledge and understanding of Microsoft Office 2007
• Excellent computer-literate skills obtained through Introduction to Business Applications, Integrated Technology, and Engineering Design & 3D Modelling

EDUCATION

• Candidate for Bachelor of Applied Science, Honours Mechanical Engineering, Co-op
University of Waterloo, Waterloo, Ontario September 2007 to present

Relevant Courses: Mechanical Engineering Communication and Professionalism, Mechanics, Engineering Graphics (Lab), Calculus for Engineers, Linear Algebra for Engineers, and Chemistry for Engineers

• Ontario Secondary School Diploma
Marc Garneau Collegiate Institution, Toronto, Ontario September 2003 to June 2007

Relevant Assignment:
F1 IN SCHOOLS, The Formula One Technology Challenge™,
Engineering Design & 3D Modelling January 2007 – July 2007

• Manufactured a working model of a F1 car using CNC tools and equipment
• Learned and functioned Denford Microrouter Compact 3 Axis and 4 Axis CNC Router to manufacture while implementing safety guidelines
1 hour ago

• Capitalized the principles of Computer Numerical Control using 3D Modelling software

Worked collaboratively, and individually on the design and manufacturing process of the F1 in school car

WORK EXPERIENCE

Interviewer (Part Time)
Kantar Operations, Toronto, Ontario July 2007 – September 2007
• Conducted public opinion survey across North America on products and services
• Maintained professionalism and reliability during survey
• Enhanced Verbal and Written communication skills
• Achieved 100% satisfaction from participants and supervisor

Sales Representative (Part Time)
Pawns Marketing, Toronto, Ontario September 2002 – July 2003
• Promoted the Toronto Sun and The Toronto Star newspaper
• Persuaded customers to subscribe to the Toronto Sun and The Toronto Star
1 hour ago

• Provided customers with full assistance in regards to the product or the service

VOLUNTEER EXPERIENCE

Librarian
Marc Garneau Collegiate Institute, Toronto, Ontario September 2003 – July 2005

Responsible for checking in and out of all books, magazines, and videos, collecting over-due fines, and assisting students in signing out computers
• Assisted students and teachers in finding books, magazines and videos
• Operated the circulation desk answering any general inquiry questions by teachers or students
• Attained satisfaction from senior librarians, teachers and students

AWARDS

• Academic Achievement, Kathleen Wynne, Toronto, Ontario, July 2007
• Ontario Scholar, Ministry of Education, Toronto, Ontario, July 2007
• Merit Scholarship, University of Waterloo, Waterloo, Ontario, May 2007
• Achieved 96% on the design and manufacturing of the F1 IN SCHOOL car
1 hour ago

• Student of the Month in Financial Accounting Fundamentals, Lincoln M. Alexander Secondary School, Mississauga, Ontario, May 2006
• Participation in Bp208, One Flap. Global Impact, Canadian International Development Agency, Gatineau, Quebec, 2003

ACTIVITIES & INTERESTS

Team Captain

Team Captain
Marc Garneau Floor Hockey Tournament (Be-Leafers), Toronto, Ontario September 2005 – July 2007
• Recruited, organized, and coached a team of 7 players to compete in a 8-way elimination tournament
• Held rigorous practise to establish teamwork skill among team players

Member
Empowering Student Protection (ESP), Toronto, Ontario September 2006 – July 2007
• Worked in a team to regulate safety rules to establish a safe and friendly school environment

REFERENCES Available upon request

Answer 1

I agree with the above answer. You should restructure your resume so that your strengths are listed first, then the fluff at the bottom.

It is not organized in a format fitting an engineer.

From my memory:

Your name/contact information.

Seeking:

Education - with GPA (not relative assignments)

Experience: Not volunteer

Publications: (were you published) or Awards - only those relative to your scholarships, curriculum.

Skills (technical only)

Hobbies and General

References available upon request.

Answer 2

It's to wordy, there is some bad English in it, primarily in structure, and not specific to a particular job. A resume' should be presented for a particular job that you want, not a compendium of what you know, and have experienced.
I would advise you to go to your library and get a book on how to write a winning resume' based on getting a particular job. Your skills in leadership are of little interest at this point because you are an unknown. What do you know that is of interest to the job that you want. As it is, it's a candidate for the round file.