Please read my student council speech and tell me what you think..Any suggestions will help?

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Good afternoon, Mr. Waterman, Mrs. Pine, Teachers, Staff, Parents, Guests, and fellow students. My name is ______ and I am running for president.
Dedicated. Responsible. And Enthusiastic. These are three words that describe me, and three reasons why you should vote for me. I cannot promise that if I am elected we will be allowed to chew gum or have no homework. But I can listen to what you, the students have to say, and pass it on to the faculty. I will try my best to meet any student requests. If that isn’t good enough, then I am not the person to elect. The only promise I can make is that I will try my hardest to help you, the students, have a memorable school year. Some ideas I have to improve the school are: more fundraisers, better food in the snack shack, and more electives. I believe that I am qualified to represent our school because I get good grades, served on student council last year as Spirit commissioner, am involved in many school activities such as t

the spelling bee and school play. I worked as a library helper, a family representative, served on lunch crew and worked at the snack shack. I am also in the leadership elective; therefore I will have more time to get things done.
While casting your vote, I ask you to look beyond popularity or who you are friends with. Look at who would be the better leader for our school.
Thanks, good luck to my opponent
And please-vote me, _____, for president
It’s easier than thinking!

Sorry its seperate, there wasnt any room for it all.

Answer 1

It sounds like you actually know what the job is, and actually want it. I'd vote for you.

Answer 2

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Answer 4

I think it is a really good speech and it might help anyone get voted, though I do think you should keep out any negatives about you or give any reason for someone to vote for you. You should try to put something funny so that you would give them something to remember. Except from that it's the honestly best speech i've ever heard.

Answer 5

You may want to go short with your greetings so that people do not become bored. Perhaps as simply as Good afternoon students and staff. The students likely should be mentioned first because they are the ones who will be doing the major part of the voting. Don't say these are words that describe me, that makes it an afterthought, try I am a responsible, dedicated and enthusiastic student. I cannot promise my election will bring the right to students to chew gum, nor am I certain it would end homework...

It sounds like you have a lot of good things to say, but the less time you take to say it, the more likely they will remember what you have said.

Answer 6

I think it's really good! You should put something funny in it to grab attention and make them remember your speech. The part where u say "... If that's not good enough then I'm not the person to vote for" or something like that, you should probably take out because you're giving them a reason to NOT vote for you. You don't want anything negative.
Otherwise, I thought it was very well written. Good Luck.

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Please read my student council speech and tell me what you think..Any suggestions will help?
Good afternoon, Mr. Waterman, Mrs. Pine, Teachers, Staff, Parents, Guests, and fellow students. My name is ______ and I am running for president.
Dedicated. Responsible. And Enthusiastic. These are three words that describe me, and three reasons why you should vote for me. I cannot promise...

Answer 8

i think the speech is good.

A few suggestions:
Don't use "try my hardest to help you"
try: "my best to help you"

If you want to try a very different approach (see below), rather than listing what you've done at school and make it part of the narrative of your story. Something that speaks about your connection to the school and people, rather saying "These are my qualifications". I believe this style sounds more like a leader and less like ambition. Good luck

"Since I came to SCHOOLNAME, i've competed in spelling bees and school plays and had a great time. I've worked as a library helper, served on school council. I've always loved my school and my friends throughout the school. So it shouldn't be a surprise that i would want to continue to work for my friends and school to make this another great year."

Your original speech is fine. My comments are more about how to "sell" than about the message to the voters.

Answer 9

This speech is for Treasurer

To our beloved principal,(name of principal), teachers, parents and students, a very pleasant morning. You may all know me, but if you do not, my name is ________. I am running for student council treasurer as a reliable, honest, trustworthy, determined and responsible person, and I believe that with my meticulous work we can have a fun time in our school, (name of school) as well more activities we can do. I feel that I am qualified for this job because I know how to effectively handle and budget money and also I am straightforward, yet punctual and exact in my work. I get good grades in math, so my calculations can be trusted as being correct, I make sure my math is completely accurate and I make sure that I could do math in my head or on paper. I can assure you, if you vote for me as treasurer, we will have a successful school year and the student council’s fund will be accurate and there will be no math mistakes. Using my ideas, we can have a successful school year.
As student council treasurer, I promise to contribute ideas and intellect to student council as well as communicating with the rest of the student body. I will do this by sharing my intentions and solutions with my peers, and my hope is to get feedback in return. Thank You! And also please vote for me!
God Bless You!

Answer 10

I think you should add something new because almost all students running for council are going to be saying they'll listen and all that stuff. Add something new and unique.

Answer 11

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sounds sophomoric. the changes you proposed must be realistic ...will it pass school administrative review? as student in a leadership position (a senator is a leader, though not over entire school) you must look at issues through eyes of the administration/school board; parents, students, and sometimes the community, at large; be able to devise a solution/compromise that will address issues in most effective/efficient means possible.