~Breathless kisses
Burning touches
Soft-spoken words of love
Urgently spoken words of passion.
A man and a woman
One complete love
Since time began
Predestined to be as one.~
2007-05-29 01:51:52 · 15 answers · asked by G?ld?n ang?l 5 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
It's lovely.
Toushka, the tissue, please!
2007-05-29 09:06:59 · answer #1 · answered by Hot Coco Puff 7 · 6⤊ 0⤋
It's too long for a saying. just hoping for 1-3 lines is good.
This poem however, has a mixed rhyming scheme and kinda hurts the flow. The punctuations are not correctly placed. Many more to revise. But I kinda like where this poem is going with the "Predestined to be as one" bit. It'd be really nice to see on a hallmark card once you revise it again =).
Rate~ 5 out of 10
2007-05-29 02:02:20 · answer #2 · answered by queenofsparta 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok. As a song writer/poetry writer...it's not the BEST thing I've ever read, but good nonetheless. Keep up the good work and see how you can make your writing better. I started by getting some books of poetry by great poets like Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allan Poe, Etc. There are so many things you can learn from great poets like that!
2007-05-29 01:56:38 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think it was really good i would rate it a 9/10 but all the stuff ive read of yours is great keep it up
2007-06-01 12:11:05 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
on an 1-10 scale ishould say 5
2007-05-29 01:54:21 · answer #5 · answered by Ralf D 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
From one to 10.....I give it a 6.
Sounds like a true love saying which is one in a million.
2007-05-29 01:54:48 · answer #6 · answered by sunflare63 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would surely rate the person or the answer on the type of question given by me or other wise i would rate the answer 2
2007-05-29 01:59:31 · answer #7 · answered by Aashi 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If I was a typical teenager, I'd give it a TEN out of ten. As a thinking adult, I'll give it a 7.
2007-05-29 01:54:36 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A commitment of an relationship.
2007-05-29 01:55:48 · answer #9 · answered by James S55$$ where I give you ME. 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Much more like a poem.....nice..7/10
2007-05-29 01:57:20 · answer #10 · answered by Ali 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice poem.
2007-05-29 01:54:36 · answer #11 · answered by Michelle H 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋