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This reform has had some temporary impact, slowing down the country’s economic development activities and reducing investment in many sectors whereas on the other hand, a sufficient economic condition is a must in having a sustainable democracy.
2007-05-10 02:57:07 · 12 answers · asked by nicequestioner 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
I think if you said:
This reform has had some temporary impact in slowing down the country's economic development activities and reducing investment in many sectors. On the other hand, a sufficient economic condition is essential in having a sustainable democracy.
2007-05-10 03:10:21 · answer #1 · answered by Phorrest 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
> This reform has had some temporary impact,
Personally, I would drop "has": "had some temporary/short-term impact"
> slowing down the country’s economic development activities
You better drop the "activities"
> and reducing investment in many sectors whereas
Maybe a comma after "sectors" : "sectors, whereas/but", or start a new sentence.
> on the other hand, a sufficient economic condition is a must in having a sustainable democracy.
I'm doubtful about "economic condition". Maybe it's an economic term, but could "activity" be used? Maybe drop the "a" : ", sufficient economic activity is a must"
I would rather use "is a must for a sustainable democracy"
"This reform had some short-term impact, slowing down the country’s economic development, and reducing investment in many sectors. But on the other hand, sufficient economic activity is a must for a sustainable democracy."
2007-05-10 10:11:59 · answer #2 · answered by Erik Van Thienen 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No.
Try separating it into 2 sentences....
This reform had some temporary impact, slowing down the country’s economic development activities and reducing investment in many sectors. On the other hand, a sufficient economic condition is a must in having a sustainable democracy.
2007-05-10 10:01:44 · answer #3 · answered by Duncarin 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
this reform has had a temporary impact, thus slowing down the country's economic development activities and reducing investment in many sectors. meanwhile a sufficient economic condition is a must in having a sustainable democracy
2007-05-10 10:11:26 · answer #4 · answered by akos 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd split it up.
This reform has had some impact in the short term, slowing down the country’s economic development activities and reducing investment in many sectors. However, for a sustainable democracy a sound economic infrastructure is a must.
I think that with this switching around the reader is more likely to read on. Please forgive me if I misinterpreted "sufficient economic condition".
2007-05-10 10:02:48 · answer #5 · answered by Doethineb 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Quite a few words are tautologous. I would write it this way, "A stable economic environment is necessary in a sustainable democracy; unfortunately this reform has had an unwelcome effect, slowing down the country's economic development, reducing investment in many sectors."
2007-05-10 10:17:36 · answer #6 · answered by Sandy 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It looks totally meaningless to me. A sufficient economic condition - what does that mean? A sufficient condition for what?
2007-05-10 10:32:53 · answer #7 · answered by supertop 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is quite correct in the English language~~
2007-05-10 10:01:34 · answer #8 · answered by burning brightly 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good example of a run-on sentence. your reader will get lost in this sentence. split it up into 2 sentences for correct MLA format. (assuming this is for college)
2007-05-10 10:01:47 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would replace "whereas on the other hand" with "however."
2007-05-10 10:02:01 · answer #10 · answered by Squirrley Temple 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋