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Question

One of my friends is writing a song for his gf, but I can't really say anything, since I'm like simon cowell. It's supposed to be a slow song.

1st Verse
Know, that you’re my heart and soul
Let go, and we can make it through
Together, then we will have a chance

Fly, no need to run away
Just try, and we will show them all
Forever, a storybook romance

Chorus
Love is a-complicated
So you know, don’t act so jaded
You’re my star in the sky,
so don’t ask me why
If our love is even real
But if there’s one thing you should know
Before I have to go,
It’s how you feel

2nd Verse
And now, there is no need to talk
Allow, our love to soar across
The sky, I’ll never let you cry

Repeat chorus

bridge
Girl, I’m trembling with fear, but I can’t let me show
How we should never part
But now I know, with the moonlit glow
Here’s a promise from my heart

Repeat chorus
Plz be honest, he's only a love-struck teenager age 15

The more opinions of any kind, the better!

Thanks for all your answers and lady26, no offense to my friend, but I don't really care, since this is his first draft and it is not my work.

Answer 1

IT's okay it needs more work on it. I think it is better wordings than these I heard on the radio, the words has a feeling to it.

Answer 2

If a guy sang that song to me, I would be nice about it and feel honored, but truth is ...I don't get it. What exactly is he trying to say? I get that he is saying Let's have a relationship, but is that all in such a long song? Then again, I'm no expert.

Answer 3

Be Caerful posting your work online. I posted a poem once online and someone copied it and siad it was thier own. its nice i like it. anyting from the heart is good :)

Answer 4

I am sorry but its not like a song.. so long