do you think this poem deserved to win?

Question

the following poem won me first place at a poem contest.

do you think it deserved to win?

Steven Bonafide Rojas

Invisible Ones

We walked
We talked
We bought
We fought
We lived
We died

We are the ones
With accents in conversations
Who get passed by on every street
As something else
Urban jibaros
Questions of skin complexion
Light or dark
¿De dónde eres?

We who are
In the middle of every discussion
Of race relations because we are dark light
Spanish English speaking tongues
Broken dialects to go with broken dreams

We who are
Fed images of false equal opportunities
And non-green carded citizenship
Capitalism and congressman
Put us all in the arms of big brother
The stranglehold of the IRS taxes

We who are
Cursed by machismo
Love salsa and meringue
Battled for self respect and our independence
Considered second-class citizens,
A prize of war of bloody Sundays
Radiation treatments

For I will tell you
Bombed by Vieques and bombed by Bushwick
Gentrified Harlem and justice rallies

Your existence we protested
And you fired your utensils of death
On women, children, and men
All dressed in white

Invisible

We who breath
The same polluted air
The same infectious water
Pray to the same gods
Sit by each other on the same train
Eat food in the same places
Listen to the same music
Attend the same schools

But are always in the middle

Trapped in the television of life
That’s black and white
Never believed in Technicolor dreams
Only in the color of green
Underpaid and over slaved
Sweatshops and chop shops
In a schizophrenic American dream

Invisible

We who fought
Over which island is better than which
On New York streets
Speaking colonized English
Instead of colonized Spanish
And fight over who has
The better food, better music,
Better ball players and better cars
Which are either American, Japanese, or German made

Never understood that we’re all from a history
That neglected us
Transformed us from savage Indians
To 21st century Pepsi pop stars
And never cared for our culture
Unless they can make a profit out of it
A media that bleaches our color
From our skin and believes
We all come with Eurocentric features with English tongues

We have afros and dreads
Straight hair, curly, kinky
Black, blonde, red hair
Thin and thick lipped
Brown eyes, blue, green
Hazel contacted eyes
Full spectrum of life
Rainbow’s beauty
Never understood
Our full potential
For our darkness and brightness
We are the invisible ones

We walked
We talked
We bought
We fought
We lived
We died

But all we wanted was
To be seen, heard, and respected
Because we bleed
Like everyone else does.

the poem was written by steven rojas

i, sergio davila, read this poem and won the gold medal

i did NOT wright this poem

please answer my question

Answer 1

Put it to rap music, it might fly somewhere.

Answer 2

The poem is distinct, as I'm definite you already know. I consider- and that is just a wager-however I THINK it is the wording of the query. You're now not inquiring for a distinctive reply, simply evaluations. If you had requested whatever like "Are there any misspellings or grammatical mistakes on this poem?" you would have gained the attraction. I'm sorry it bought deleted, specially because how so much trash flies via right here unscathed.

Answer 3

Well if it was a contest of reading poetry and you read it well then yes. If it was a contest of writing poetry well then you plagiarized ( well actually just plain ripped off ) someone elses work.

its a pretty well put together work albeit really long.

Answer 4

I like it. It's a little long but it's a good poem.

Answer 5

i write and read poetry, i appreciate a good poem when i read it. yes it's good. but i must tell you it sounds a little racist. i agree with it, but what does it have to do with illegals?

Answer 6

It is a reall good good poem but the fact is illegal is breaking the law no matter how beautiful you make it sound.

Answer 7

Thats been proven to be a fraud