So i am trying to get back together with my girlfriend who broke up with me after I wrote her a heart felt poem, so I wrote her another poem.
Look at the sun
Its in the sky
Look at the moon
Its time for pie
I work at autozone
Whats up with the rise in oil change prices?
Do you love me
because you better
You better, better, better, better, DId I say better
So whats wrong with a politcal system
breath mints
Happy new years
you old hag
love ya
2006-12-30 10:06:57 · 7 answers · asked by JuliusRomans 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I like this poem. I want to buy it from you. This may be just what I need to win back the hearts of my three ex-wives.
2006-12-31 08:11:59 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'm not trying to be mean but if your trying to get back with ur girl with poetry the poem needs to be romantic and kinding! your poem doesn't make sense and the poem should be about her! i would leave out where u work and calling her a hag cause thats mean! make a another poem and make it about her!when you make another one post it up and see what happens!!!
2006-12-30 10:14:37 · answer #2 · answered by sweet sixteen 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That poem will surely drive her even further away in my opinion. It sounds like something a stalker would write to his intended victim, and you call her an old hag in the end, which is not going to speed her return to your arms, quite the opposite. So, Chill, Get some help, and learn to move on and not be so possessive.
2006-12-30 10:12:44 · answer #3 · answered by Crowfeather 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
it can not be a verbal replace. That does no longer be a monologue. it relatively is a tale poem, and you do no longer ought to even use the be conscious "I." It became a time for extra no longer much less, To take a plunge without a care, And roam afar in candy extra.
2016-11-25 01:35:22 · answer #4 · answered by luciani 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If ur tryin to get her..Might wanna write a poem about her or something..& one that actually makes sense & doesnt talk about stores or anything..!! Keep working on it..!
2006-12-30 10:23:27 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wtf, rofl. I wish I could help you but I only write emo-ish poems. Try to say big words, and make it sound nice. Don't compare anything to stores, or pepsi, or w/e. Just think about her, and the love yall share real hard, and word'll come to you. IM me for more poem help. Hopefully I can. O,o
2006-12-30 10:10:04 · answer #6 · answered by Kevin H 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
~ i think you better keep working on it. you're almost there. lol ~
2006-12-30 10:11:00 · answer #7 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋