This is about a guy who feels he is with "the one" but cannot shake the feeling of wanting to have discrete fun with another woman, and afterwards he feels horrible but again eventually the urge comes back...he feels this is how he keeps the rel going and interesting....plz read....
A look into her eyes
A feeling like no other
Without her im deprived
Of my future childrens mother
But when were apart
Its a whole different story
She still owns my heart
But it gets a little boring
I cant shake the feeling
Of wanting to explore
Meet up at the hotel building
With another woman for a little more
After im done
The urge is satisfied
Ive had my fun
Time to go back to the wife of mine
I get home and see her face
She greets me with a soft kiss
Now I feel out of place
Ive done wrong and now kno this
So this is my question
Even though I sneak
I feel we were destined
Is it love if i cheat?
2006-12-20 22:43:07 · 12 answers · asked by gwbgod 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
omg could you look past the "moral" or whatever and just tell me what you think of the poem itself...some ppl are so simple minded...lol its not what im trying to say its how im bringing and i dont want you to answer the question "is it love if i cheat" i want to kno how the layout is, does it project the story....
2006-12-20 22:48:12 · update #1
Oh and i left out the commas and have other grammatical errors on purpose b/c it didnt fit with all that on there, im only allowed 1000 characters so i had to work with that....thx tho
2006-12-20 22:49:33 · update #2
This is not about me, its just a generalized poem...im 20 and im single def never been married...ok now can i just get opinions on the POEM and not what ppl think of me...
2006-12-20 22:50:53 · update #3
I like the poem, its true to life. I thinks its well written, I would change a few words in the third stanza, to make it flow a lil better, but thats just me. Keep it up!
I hope thats what you were looking for...
2006-12-20 23:08:40 · answer #1 · answered by Pippichic 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NO, IT'S NOT LOVE IF YOU CHEAT! If this poem is in reference to you, you are a scumbag.
Well, if that is the case, and it is not about anyone in particular, then it all sounds o.k. except, I would change this part (the second line).
Meet up at the hotel building
With another woman for a little more
2006-12-21 06:45:31 · answer #2 · answered by Billys girl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
to answer the question on the last stanza...No, cheating does not mean love.
Hopefully the person who cheats feels incredibly guilty for his infidelity and decides to be faithful to his wife.
and I don't think it's necessary to try to rhyme poetry. Especially If it's a serious issue like this then it's dumb to rhyme. Just an opinion
2006-12-21 06:48:56 · answer #3 · answered by Just me. 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If he's married, then it's wrong. Simply as that. He took vows, "for better or worse", and he needs to live up to those vows. Otherwise, drop her like a bad habit. As far as the poem, nice piece, with a few errors, for a daring subject matter.
Neurotically Yours,
NightSpawn
2006-12-21 06:48:03 · answer #4 · answered by the_nightspawn 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is wrong of you to cheat. The poem is written well but you have a very guilty conscience don't you? That's the part you should listen to.
2006-12-21 06:48:39 · answer #5 · answered by Maggie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You male WHORE, you don't know what LOVE is.
You call these urges not love.
Whoever this poem is about is a sorry person.
Cheating is not love, cause you are only cheating your self.
2006-12-21 06:51:17 · answer #6 · answered by popo dean 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, you love her.
Do not feel guilty , it s true man nature..
feel the same with my chosen one.. just, i can feel the diffrence between the only one and the other one.
I would change boring, it does not sound. bit harsh.
2006-12-21 06:50:40 · answer #7 · answered by 2001-odyssee 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice if you like things about lying and cheating
2006-12-21 06:45:46 · answer #8 · answered by caralinar 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you aint fooling no one but yourself! thats just straight up bull ****! you cant say you love some one and turn around and want another! thats just wrong wrong wrong! you need psychological counsiling i think or your just that shallow of a person! poems of your kind just dont cut it!
2006-12-21 06:50:00 · answer #9 · answered by Phaque tu" 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no man is an island, your just human being capable of making mistakes but always beware it is addictive.
2006-12-21 06:48:37 · answer #10 · answered by lina i 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋