What do you think of this i wrote it myself, i wrote it for a guy i met?

Question

To think you were supposed to be amazing when you actually werent,
To think you promised me so many things but never came through,
What did i ever do to you,
I really did like you,
But i found out the hard way,
You were not at all what you imagine yourself to be,
So with this...i say goodbye,
To the one night you kissed me softly,
To the one night you looked into my eyes,
And you never even said,
GOODBYE!
by Gloria

Well i kinda just made it up...didnt really fix it much. Well they guy he did like me at first....but then one day he just stopped talking to me...i have no idea why? Worst part is i tried to talk to him but i never got an answer.

Answer 1

if your asking my opinion on your technique..... You're too obvious and open there's no space for imagination to take place to what you want to portray its more like you're venting to me

on the situation..... you put too much stock in his words instead of listening to what he has'nt said to you, considering the impression your giving me, he is too much into himself and he enjoys hearing himself talk.

this is of course if your talking about a personand not a thing.
take more time to research you objects of affection in all things you won't be as dissapointed as quickly

if your interested go to poetry.com search vernon smith (myself)
scroll down shorty to smith vernon d and select "bitter" something i wrote over 15 years ago. describing my state at the time where i hope you wont become.

enjoy.

vernon

by the way the book they publish looks great.

Answer 2

You said "you were amazing", Not!
Your promises sank like the Titanic.
I was good to you, what a waste.
I thought you deserved my affection.
But you did not.
I found out the hard way you were a jerk.
So with these words, I say,
Good Bye. So long, and Get lost.

This is what I would say to a guy who hurt me. Don't give this guy the benefit of knowing you liked the kiss, or his way he looked at you. You are doing good at writing a good-bye letter. Give it a little adjustment, and it will work out.
Just don't hold a grudge for to long, this may affect you later on.

Answer 3

Take it easy, there are many guys out there with an insaturable appetite...that is they just want to taste different girls everyday...
For them it's just a matter of physical pleasure, and they have no idea that it's not just her body but also her heart and most delicate sensations which is being touched...
But there are faithful and caring ones, again out there waiting for you...You'll get used to the new guy soon...and if you find one please don't forget to choose me as best answer :-P

Answer 4

I suppose you really like this guy, that's why you wrote him this mushy poem..

What you write there is great but it can make him run to the hill..

Save this poem for yourself..

You only have met him, guys don't like over agressive gals..

If you are in relationship with him, also it can drive him away..

If you really like him, I think by being nice, friendly and always smile at him is enough :-)

Answer 5

cute, it's good to write down your feelings. Not outstanding though. Take writing classes, learn the dos and don'ts of poetry and you might be able to make this one good.

Answer 6

Have you ever heard of poetry.com? they might publish it. they are publishing mine into a coffee table book. and you could win a prize. I think it sounds nice.

Answer 7

Interesting.

Its an interesting poem.

Answer 8

...daaaaaayumn. Sounds like a guy really treated you badly! It's really pretty though *_* really great! good job :)

Answer 9

Selfish. Get over this duche bag without showing him how much you actually cared about him.

Answer 10

as a person who truly likes poetry i have to say it was really good.