the roses are dying
the violets are dead
standing in her room,
she puts the gun to her head.
she used to be so happy
and never touched the knife
but then something happened
to make her want to take her life
she was never the same
since that one terrible day
when she starting cutting
and wanting to take her life away
it was all because
of some stupid boy
who treated her terribly
like she was some emotionless toy
it hurt her so much,
killed her inside,
so she took her rusted knife
and let herself die
a heartbroken girl
put the gun to her head,
pulled the trigger,
and now that girls dead
sometimes i wonder
could i have changed her mind?
but now its too late,
shes left life behind.
2006-12-01 08:55:27 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i think its a good poem
2006-12-01 08:57:38 · answer #1 · answered by iamloved387 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Absolutely beautiful. I write poetry as well. I am working on my book called All Seasons. That was really touching. It was very sad but absolutely beautiful. Nice work.
2006-12-01 16:59:34 · answer #2 · answered by shellese2 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great.
hm, i must confess sometimes i feel like that girl.
it' sad that girl pulls the trigger.
i would be glad to read that the girl has overcome that.
that's what i try to do.
but that would be totally different poem.
2006-12-01 17:00:39 · answer #3 · answered by lika.WHY 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love your poem, i wish i had a writting talent like you. you have put so much emotion into it and i just love the words you so carefully chose it is an awesome poem.
2006-12-01 17:01:40 · answer #4 · answered by lovefergieangel 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can do one better
There was a bird with a yellow bill
Who sat upon my window sill
I lured it to me with some bread
And then I crushed it's f***ing head
2006-12-01 17:00:08 · answer #5 · answered by EZ Wider 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good poem, but if its real, from your life you should talk to someone about it.
Keep writing poems
2006-12-01 17:05:16 · answer #6 · answered by sharing 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is a sad poem...that is why i try to help as many people as i can...many people are out there depressed and they need help...i think that this poem shows it.
i like it..it is very interesting...
2006-12-01 16:58:44 · answer #7 · answered by VIVI 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Happy, Happy, Happy, Joy, Joy, Joy!!!
2006-12-01 16:59:16 · answer #8 · answered by kjbopp 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great writing!
Keep it up-I would love to read some of your other stuff that isn't so macabre.
2006-12-01 17:02:47 · answer #9 · answered by Bec 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
HEY!! what a grrrrrrrrrr-eat poem. I liked it. its really emotional but please tell me that its not about you coz killing yourself really doesn't solve anything. Trust me. I've been there, done that (not killing myself) but I've thought about it and gotten some help. So please if that's you then please talk to someone close to you who can really give you some advice and stop you from doing that. Okaii..
2006-12-01 17:04:09 · answer #10 · answered by 67 GuRl 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋