Mommy Please Don’t Cry
By: Kenny P. aka- Cobra
I don’t remember how I got here,
Or why, I’m up above.
But I know I’m not alone,
In this place I’m speaking of.
I just want you to know,
that I’m doing fine, in this perfect place.
so try not to cry, and worry too much,
Because I’m in His hands, and in His loving grace.
So remember these words I say to you,
and promise me, you’ll carry on.
I’ll always be your loving daughter,
and I’ll be here, you’re whole life long.
It wasn’t your fault; this I know is true,
so never think, you could have changed it.
just remember, all the years we shared,
and that I’ll always be, in your loving spirit.
2006-11-19 12:11:46 · 12 answers · asked by physandchemteach 7 in Pregnancy & Parenting ➔ Parenting
That is a very beautiful and reassuring poem. It brought a tear to my eye yet peace in my heart. Good Job!!
2006-11-19 12:16:11 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 5⤊ 0⤋
If you are asking about the aestetic appeal of the poem, then I would suggest trying to have the same amount of syllables or pattern in each stanza.
In other words:
"I just want you to know,
that I’m doing fine, in this perfect place.
so try not to cry, and worry too much,
Because I’m in His hands, and in His loving grace."
might sound better if you edited it down to:
"I just want you to know,that I’m doing fine, in this perfect place.
so try not to cry, and worry too much,
Because I’m in His loving grace."
As for subject matter, it is obviously from the heart and no one can deny the power of a poem derived from personal anguish.
2006-11-19 20:25:49 · answer #2 · answered by dove rizzle 2 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Yes i love it, sad but you did a great job.
2006-11-19 20:30:56 · answer #3 · answered by One Love 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
The answer for the question depends on the age of the writer. If it is under 20, then I would say it is very magnificent. Over 20, then I ould say okay, but could improve. But Shakespeare is still better, no offense. Also, I think this poem reminds those parents of how children love them, no matter what they say (like I wish i had better parents, i hate you, etc.)
2006-11-19 20:22:29 · answer #4 · answered by Andizzle Foshizzle 4 · 0⤊ 6⤋
i am a very poetic person my self and reguardles if u wrote it or not i thought it was amazing<3
2006-11-19 20:47:30 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
This is a great poem, you are very talented!!
2006-11-20 11:57:00 · answer #6 · answered by mama 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
who wrote this poem? u or cobra?
2006-11-20 06:48:08 · answer #7 · answered by angelina 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is good, but sad!
2006-11-19 20:24:04 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
well, as one poet to another, l think its, ! ok, ! lol
2006-11-19 20:36:00 · answer #9 · answered by Cobra 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sad, but good
2006-11-19 20:19:49 · answer #10 · answered by mktk401 4 · 4⤊ 0⤋