-- clear my head. My relationship is begining to ge to me so I decided to take some advice and write again, though I'm not sure how much good it's done.
Drip, Drip, Drip
So it begins a drop,
a tap, a chip
in the armour, the dam, the dyke
and unleashed is the floor, the torment, the torrential rains
of fear and pain
the tears
Shattered. Fragmented. Oblterated
Lost
blinded by winds that chill the soul
no longer is there control
Cold, Broken, Bleeding
Desolate
--- Yes I know it's not a quesition. I just felt like using his avenue to express myself.
2006-09-11 10:07:46 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
the word in line 5 is supposed to be "flood" not "floor"
2006-09-11 14:41:01 · update #1
It hits home let me tell you. You've got me, right in the pocket (the heart) that is shattered and broken and needing someone so much, all I see is the face, hands, walk, voice, and the last words he said to me, which broke me in half......my hand is poison and unneeded. It will never know the feeling of his skin, his face, his thigh, or buttocks, I die slowly but surely. Desolate is a good word.......death to the heart.........nevermore...........Oh GOD help me please as he is my joy and love forever, I adore him. Crying is a part of my life and I can't even see anymore, even to drive.....I'm so pitiful that noone wants me anyway.......you are so talented and got to me deeply.. Don't give it up. I would read your words always............
2006-09-11 15:07:20 · answer #1 · answered by silhouette 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a great poem. I can feel u. Don't stop writin, u'll be big one day. Mark my word.
2006-09-11 10:09:30 · answer #2 · answered by DTW3 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice poem
i hope that you'll be able to let go of all the tension that you have bottled inside
good luck
2006-09-11 10:13:20 · answer #3 · answered by annie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats really good it speaks volumes ! i write myself but this is much better than my work yours flows really nicely !
2006-09-11 14:36:51 · answer #4 · answered by Danielle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
cool express away
2006-09-11 10:08:56 · answer #5 · answered by Happy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
don't quit your day job
2006-09-11 10:10:01 · answer #6 · answered by not_your_average*chick 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok
2006-09-11 10:09:27 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
There is no try.
only
do
or
do not!
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2006-09-11 10:14:32 · answer #8 · answered by DM 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋