Is this a good poem?

Question

My Heart

I thought you luved me
But I was rong
you used me
you lied 2 me
you sed I was the only 1
But that was a lie
you sed you luved me
That was a lie
and now Im a mess
I cant fix myself
you want 2 no wats broken
Well ill tell you
My heart
Its broken
In half
I dont no how 2 put it 2gether again
I dont think its posible
you broke it
So you fix it
Wait no
Thats a bad idea
Your the 1 who broke it
youll make it worse
4get it
Dont touch my heart
Its already broken in half
youll make it worse
youll probably brake it in 2 tiny pieces
Brake each half
Into halves
At least 10 more times
and then stomp on it
Jump on it
Pop it
you cant possibly do anything more 2 it
I dont think any1 can fix it
So I mite as well give it 2 you
Do wat ever you want with it
Throw in on the ground
Jump on it
Pop it
Break it up
Or maybe not
Maybe it’s better to just keep it the way it is
Broken in half
Never be fixed
Just the way it is
Right now

Answer 1

Are you 13 ?.. Am i Right ?. More than deep, it is suicide. It is not the long poem, it is too much repetition.. more of the same. A little problem with the spelling, but let me tell you dear, you are on the way. Keep writing... that is the only way to improve. Good Luck, at your age, i could not write poems like this.
Suerte !

Answer 2

Don't like it. It's long . . . It doesn't sound like a poem. It's an essay or words that you would be saying during an argument. That's why poetry is in it's own category of writing. Poetry flows. It's like water . . . . this poem doesn't flow well from my lips and it has no depth. You're just saying whatever you want. Maybe you should start rhyming first and then work your way up . . . Sorry I really hated this work of yours. But keep practicing . . . (and don't give this to anyone)

Answer 3

I wouldn't call it a poem. It's more like simple prose. It's not metaphorical, there's no metrics, rhyme or aliteration or anything verbal that would make it poetic. It reads like a rant with awkward line breaks. Keep practicing. Study some of the greats like Whitmann or Eliot.

Answer 4

thats a pretty dang good peom heres mine

THE GIRL
To the girl who let my world,
to the gal who shall be loved with the inner core of my heart ,
till the day i die or the time i give my soul away.

pretty good eeh send me some more id like to read em

and the pepole who say you cant spell F them i dont care who cnt and can spell they just to high sasiaty you know rich pepole who think they ALL DAT god i hate those pepole

Answer 5

simple but not bad, sounds like you are going through a hate, depressed phase. You need an outlet, try Alkaline Trio (the band) and really listen to the words. their older stuff is really good.

Answer 6

well lets ignore the spelling errors, I think its a little long .... you do get the point out that someone broke your heart and for that I am sorry ..... But to be honest as a poem its not that great

Answer 7

This is a wonderful poem minus the bad spelling. I'm truly touched.

Answer 8

Actually i am a published poet.........so ill tell you honestly.....my quote "Poetry is what it means to you personally. You can try to guess what the poet is thinking, feeling, or saying, but it is how it effects you that makes it beautiful to those who love it." I happen to have enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing

Answer 9

Yes, it is. I am a young writer, and I find every poem and story just delightful! Keep up the writing, and follow your dreams!

Answer 10

Well, I think it's alrite. Butt U mite want to use U'r spell checker. People akcept it more when things is properly spelt.