2006-07-06 18:57:02 · 13 answers · asked by cris9788 1 in Games & Recreation ➔ Gambling
Might be complicating to figure out
Can't lie I need to express them more
I don't understand why It's hard
I feel my thoughts might cause pain
I feel my thoughts may be to much for you to handle
Maybe that's why I keep my thoughts
My thoughts come to me one by one
But I, expressing my thoughts
I feel as though my thoughts even hurt me
Is this why I hold my thoughts for the pain
Is this why i nevr act upon my thoughts
Is this why it is hard for me to talk
Although I express my thoughts sometimes
But only to myself, my pen and pad
And sometimes I speak my thoughts
I still speak my thoughts to myself while alone
My thoughts hurt me more i think
Because my thoughts are mostly of you hurting me
2006-07-07 02:22:53 · update #1
Maybe, very good.
2006-07-19 10:34:32 · answer #1 · answered by CottonPatch 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Ok, I just read your poem, glad you finally put it up. Where as it is a nice poem I would say you probably won't win any contest with it. Your poem is all over the place and lacks any structure at all. I get what you are saying in the poem but for some reason it fails to draw me in as I feel you are trying to do. You feel emotion in the poem but haven't really dug deep enough for the right words to express your pain. You also have ALOT of repetitive words, like thoughts, I and is. A good poem can use a lot of the same words but yours are being used in more of an over done sense. Be a little bit more descriptive, a thesaurus might help you to find better words for your feelings.
2006-07-07 02:05:40 · answer #2 · answered by jennanna 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poetry contest is not gambling. If you are tralented, if you are able to write fine poem - why not?
2006-07-07 02:03:08 · answer #3 · answered by alakit013 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem really sucks man...
2006-07-19 16:53:59 · answer #4 · answered by Hugo H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes you will, don't question my ways of knowing.
2006-07-07 11:02:14 · answer #5 · answered by alexsport3000 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
eneter it what ya got to loose
2006-07-16 13:55:36 · answer #6 · answered by Leveler 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it depends on how great your poems are and how great your competitors poems are.
2006-07-07 02:01:28 · answer #7 · answered by merr 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you wont know till you enter one and find out.
2006-07-07 02:00:29 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
maybe it depends on how good your pomem is
2006-07-07 02:03:19 · answer #9 · answered by cheese 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well do u have a poem
2006-07-07 05:27:28 · answer #10 · answered by bogusmebe 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋