I am going to sleep now dear primordial friends. Before I do, will you stroll with me along the knoll of eternity...gazing into the vast exploding galaxies of the One who made you...ahhhh...let us promenade the prominad of the pulsating bosom of the eternal....Hark!!! what is that I hear ? Is it the splashing of thy uncle the fish ? Or is it the bhuddistic chanting sounds of your your cousins the gorillas of the high country ? Avast! is it the flying albatross on His way to an anti creation science class...nay! Tis the sound of my TV on Disney channel. Sorry...my bad. I love thee fair anti God friends....may angelic amoebas take thee to thy rest tonight.... Will I see you all tomorrow ? Do you by some chance find some love for me in thy primordial beating hearts ? Truly...can we meet tomorrow at the Dairy Queen for a banana split and let by gones be by gones ? Plz respond.
2006-07-04 15:42:30 · 18 answers · asked by ? 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
dang...I misspelled another thingie up there... doubled " your "...sorry....really its ur magnetic personalities that make me misspell....really....trust me.....
2006-07-04 15:44:43 · update #1
dang...I feel the love in this place...read those answers down there .......
2006-07-04 16:00:23 · update #2
Excellent poetry! Aside from some spelling issues (promenade and promenade should be spelled the same way; they have the two meanings you wish us to understand with the same spelling), it is a very good entry into serious, thoughtful poetryl You loose it a bit with this, though:
"Avast! is it the flying albatross on His way to an anti creation science class...nay! Tis the sound of my TV on Disney channel. Sorry...my bad. I love thee fair anti God friends....may angelic amoebas take thee to thy rest tonight...."
etc.
Sounds a bit like "Aarrh, Maties!" meets Robin Williams kind of stuff - takes away from your initial display of talent and well-expressed emotion. A bit like "Pirates of the Caribbean" and "Ferris Bhueler", both of which are Disney movies(coincidence?? Have you been watching a lot of TV Adverts?? ). You can do better, it is obvious!
You use wonderfull classically descriptive and flowing word sequences in the first part of your poetry, but you hurried the second part as though "strapped" for images, using the closest experiences you had without taking time to develop equal timbre in your description.That tends to "dumb it down"; you can use references to american iconographs, and maintian the classical approach your poetry began with - it takes practice.
I would say you are fairly young, under 21, and experiencing a growth period where you are trying to reconcile old-world morals with new-age experiences. Tough to do!
Keep at it - you do have the makings of a good poet. I would suggest you need to read and understand some more classics, particularly the adjective methods. Apply this classical understanding to modern experience in a manner that is less disjointed for the above-average reader, and you will be on your way!
Good Luck!
2006-07-04 16:13:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
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The banana split is in danger... you know, you have to be aware that all the bananas in the world are sister-bananas. It would only take a few minutes for a mad atheist scientist to create=evolve a bug, a sort of 'super bananamoeba' that could attack, and devour, all the little baby banana sisters in the world... and fuick! bord! chrysler! No more banana split!!!!! If the Disney TV channel was being honest about telling you things, they would run a documentary about it... I just happen to be working on one... I am a filmmaker, really, 'kino-otvet' the name of the company...
I will respond. I will respong: BANANAMOEBA ANGELS CRAWLING THE INTERNET ON SWINGS OF DESIRE.
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2006-07-05 00:49:39 · answer #2 · answered by reading_is_dangerous 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'd rather meet at Hooters, but since you're only 12, I guess we'll have to settle for Dairy Queen.
Good night and try not to let your drunkenness affect your nightmares.
2006-07-04 15:46:29 · answer #3 · answered by Left the building 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
How can you make fun of the evolutionary process that God established for the creation of human beings? God will not forget that you scoffed at him.
2006-07-04 15:46:37 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Fare well fair one, until the sun rises beyond the crest of Earth, let the moon's meek compassion shed her light upon you as the wane of day becomes your slumber.
As it is, as it were, it shall be.
Banana split and all.
2006-07-04 15:59:03 · answer #5 · answered by Intuit Birth 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Well, in that case sleep well, and hopefully by morning you'll have grown up and removed the pretentiousness from your annoying personality.
2006-07-04 15:50:31 · answer #6 · answered by dylanwalker1 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Pleasant dreams :)
Can we compromise and go to Baskin-Robbins 31 flavors instead?
2006-07-04 15:47:18 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Do you propose good evening as in "see you later" or goodnight as in "ok i visit mattress now". the first one say such issues as "have a useful nighttime" or "i am hoping to work out you back quickly" the second one say "pleasant desires" or "i will see you interior the morning."
2016-10-14 03:22:10 · answer #8 · answered by sharona 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Mental patient.
2006-07-04 15:45:39 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'd wager that you were one of the editors of your high-school's literary magazine.
2006-07-04 15:45:21 · answer #10 · answered by wrathpuppet 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋