ok here is another poem i wrote 4 my babigurl .. i wrote it lastnite while watchin fireworks! lol
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You have my heart and all my love it holds. you saved me and with out you i would be back to my old ways. i would be dead. the happiness i feel is like non other i always have a smile on my face.
I always want you there
for me to talk to and hold and kiss for me to love you
i have never felt so close to anyone, i always hold back and end up not truly being myself. with you it the opposite. i care so much about you like id ever be able to live without you.
i always want you there
for me to talk to and hold and kiss for me to love you
i look in your eyes and i see that you care about me and i see that you love me, sometimes i think i don't deserve you but that doesn't matter because i love you and you love me.
i always want you there
for me to talk to and hold and kiss
for me to love you
2006-07-04 14:45:59 · 19 answers · asked by (`·–•²¡RèåÞèR²•–·´) 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Personally coming from a fellow poet i like it. Give it to her. Definately. It has a lot of heart and soul in it i could feel just from reading it that u really do love her and i think she would totally appreciate it. Very nice work and keep it up.
2006-07-04 14:49:14 · answer #1 · answered by psycholilblondegirl 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow tats beautiful you know things like tat happen after i lost both my granpa and dad i wrote a lot of poems my self and the moment my uncle backstab me tat was always a good time to write something and even if theres no problem coming up in my life it keeps me writing and YOU ROCK and keep on writing
2006-07-04 21:52:04 · answer #2 · answered by Rachel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You not only have a very lucky girlfriend,but I hope you seek publication of your work soon! Try sending in something to Reader's Digest! I look forward to seeing more of your work in the future! (P.S. I'm 44)
2006-07-04 21:53:16 · answer #3 · answered by Maw 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is good. Anyone who can write poetry is good. I can't do it, never have been able to. It is all over my head.
2006-07-04 21:48:48 · answer #4 · answered by jbpammy004 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If they are truly words from your own heart, it couldn't be anything more than beautiful. I definitely liked it. :)
2006-07-04 21:50:00 · answer #5 · answered by Melanie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is sweet and you shouldn't make us the judge, let your own girlfriend decide that :). I hope she likes it. Good luck :)!
2006-07-04 21:47:19 · answer #6 · answered by SweetTina 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like is its Good
2006-07-04 21:47:29 · answer #7 · answered by Denise 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautifully done!! The poem is b-e-a-utiful.
2006-07-04 21:49:37 · answer #8 · answered by ♥mcmanda♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's good because it comes from your heart! i hope she loves it...I know if someone gave that to me I would!
2006-07-04 21:49:05 · answer #9 · answered by xcarxcrashx 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is nowhere near a poem in my opinion. it's a bit sappy but hey, who isn't sappy when (ugh!) in love?
2006-07-04 21:47:52 · answer #10 · answered by early_sol 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋