Isis jumped off and rested at a corner of the living room. Now my eyes were getting heavy and slowly they closed. Everything went black for a moment until I found myself in a small empty room. Master stood beside me and there was a bearded man sitting in a corner shivering. He wore torn up clothing and some of his yellow teeth were missing.
"What do you want from me," he said. "I’ll give you anything you want just let me go."
"You idiot.” said Master. “I do not want anything from you. Now, I need someone for Lily's lesson.”
"Lesson?" said the old man. "What is this ‘lesson’ are you teaching her?”
Master chuckled. "Lily, what is the most vulnerable organ in
the body?"
"The heart, Master"
"What happens to the victim when the heart is damaged?"
“He dies." I whispered.
"Good. Now I want you to ki-"
"You are sick" said the old man, "Is this why you
raised her? To create an assassin out of her? What kind of man would
teach a six year old to kill?"
"Children are so easy." said Master. "They make better servants, when raised at such a young age. My Lily is a perfect example
Master kneeled to my side. "Lily," He whispered. "Do you love Master?"
"I do," I whispered back.
"Do you want to make Master happy?"
"I do."
"Then kill that old man in front of you. Make me
happy."
Master handed me a dagger and I walked forward. The man smiled.
“Jesus loves you” he said, “ That man you serve is none other than the dark prince himself, Satan.”
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AUTHOR'S NOTES:
I'M SORRY, IF ALL OF THIS OFFENDED YOU. BUT I'M AN ASPIRING WRITER AND I HOPE TO BECOME FAMOUS. I'M NOT A CHRISTIAN, I'M JEWISH.
THE LITTLE GIRL IS SIX YEARS OLD. SHE LOVES HER MASTER AND HE IS THE ONLY ONE SHE KNOWS. AND JUST BECAUSE SHE LOVES HIM SHE'LL DO ANYTHING HE SAYS. HER NAME IS LILY.
PRETEND YOU ARE THE OLD MAN IN THE STORY. WHAT WOULD YOU SAY TO HER?
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THE OLD MAN IS A CHRISITAN, A DEVOTED ONE. HE WANTS TO SAVE THE GIRL'S SOUL.
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PRETEND THIS MAN IS A PREACHER. WHAT WOULD HE SAY.
2007-12-29 05:00:00 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
ALSO IF YOU LIKE THIS STORY PLEASE TELL ME.
2007-12-29 05:00:36 · update #1
Let the old man's eyes speak to her without words. Let her spirit read them.
Hope that helps.
2007-12-29 05:08:46 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i dont really know what i wuld do i the particular situation it sounds eally hard. i guess just try my best to talk to Lily about God. Tell her that h loves her very much and that he doesnt want her to be lost to Satan aka the master. maybe tell her that if she reall loved themaster she would not do it because if she did then Master would go to hell for telling to do something like kill. and if she didnot want him to go there then she should not do it. but it sounds like a good story. good luck.
2007-12-29 05:07:21 · answer #2 · answered by ooe4eva 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was interesting. I do however, see the master as anyone someone serves blindly with no thought of the concequences their actions have on themselves or other people. Anyone, or anything can hold that position of master, including God.
Interesting story though. I like dark fiction like this.
2007-12-29 05:07:17 · answer #3 · answered by Lillith 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am a writer and I can understand wanting to get help to get past a block. But unless you want to give me cut of the royalties, I am not interested in writing your most climactic scenes for you.
It does sound like good story.
2007-12-29 05:06:21 · answer #4 · answered by Thrice Blessed 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. You could probably draw this scene out a lot longer, as it's a pretty good climax. greater detail about the room, the girl, and the men maybe?
2007-12-29 05:05:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It could very well be a christian story. They aren´t exactly known as being peaceful, caring and loving.
2007-12-29 05:07:01 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
May God forgive you Lily because you do not know what you are doing.
2007-12-29 05:06:33 · answer #7 · answered by Neptune2bsure 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
christians ? oh yeah, the people who worship a naked man nailed to a tree ( in jerusalem,the romans didn't bother with building crosses).........good luck with your book !
2007-12-29 05:11:16 · answer #8 · answered by Vicky S 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very disturbing and it sounds like a real situation.
2007-12-29 05:03:25 · answer #9 · answered by ? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
If you want your writing skills reviewed, take it to an editorial office.
2007-12-29 05:05:21 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋