My Revision of the poem. Comment honestly and tell me what correction I have to make.?

Question

In a cave I lurk,
Hidden from the outside
I cannot see what I am,
Or where I am from.

The forest is my home,
And the earth my boundary,
I am but a little one,
But shall evolve to become part of my pack,
And I will become the one.

But first I must go through the many levels of life,
From base to consequential is a challenge,
A challenge I can’t make alone,
The challenge of becoming a leader.

To lead is my proud father’s job,
And I intend to follow him,
But following his footsteps is the challenge,
For it took him handfuls of battles to become one,
But I will be better,
For I am destined for that place,
The place of a leader.

The day finally comes,
When the stench of meat sways near my nose,
For a new leader was chosen,
Not me.

I had to come with nervousness by my side,
When we began growling and ripping,
For both of us wanted the same thing,
To become a leader.

When the battle ended,
I began to feel a sense of pride and leadership,
Like my father standing tall,
I have overcome my challenge,
And become who I’ve wanted to become,
A leader

I took out the stupid alliterations. Was that a good decision?

Answer 1

Sounds fine to me especially, the play with idioms:
footsteps and handfuls here,

"But following his footsteps is the challenge,
For it took him handfuls of battles to become one"

Good style below. It is as if you are not nervous but it simply accompanies you:

"I had to come with nervousness by my side"

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Answer 2

I think you tell a good story. I like the part up to I will become the one. There is room for a universal interpretation. It is enjoyable to have things left for the reader to imagine.
When the stench of meat seems too disgusting.

How about
When the nimble deer lies still
The new leader lunges to take his part.
While I must wait my turn,
But I will be the leader of the pack some day.