another poem from me?

Question

flowers need sunshine
violets need dew
the love that you recieve
is a gift from me to you
like pen to a paper
like candles on a cake
i love the way you make me feel every single day
like apples on a tree
like grapes on a vine
you told me no matter what happens you'll always be mine
i love what more can i say

Answer 1

In my view, I liked the other one better. It was quite touching and deployed persuasive images. But in both, you have admirable skill especially in how you end the pieces. Yes, as the other comments indicated, you leave the reader suddenly but with some image imprinted in the mind.
With respect to this poem, I think the images are not quite striking. Whereas in the other one you inter-changed eye with heart so that the heart is the one in pain instead of the eye (as casual readers would assume), here the the gift of love is "like pen to a paper." That is a bit dry. Pen, paper (Do you hear the p-p-p-sound!!). The consonance are too 'pugnacious like a pug' and hence not reflecting the warmth, tenderness and modesty of the Love gift offered the addressee. Of course candles on cake is much better but I still get this uncomfortable feeling that the simile does not quite capture the priceless value of the gift unpretentiously offered.
Instead of " love the way you make me feel every single day," you may want to rid it of extraneous baggage by saying simply "everyday" or think of another better way to shorten for metrical purposes.
The way "YOU" make you feel is passionate: hence abstract noun is intended eg honesty, happiness, hospitality etc. Likening that feeling to " apples on a tree" is a bit awkward. The apples may fall down during a thunderstorm but the feeling YOU gives the speaker everyday is constant. Hence apples up a tree, though delicious, are wont to to succumb to the ravages of nature. 'Grapes and vine' is just fine except needs recasting. Save words here also "you told me . . . ." Too prosaic. Check spelling of "recieve"

Last line: "i love what more can i say" Perfect, don't even add a period. Don't even capitalize first-person voice. Tha small i communicates the some whispering an intimate secret and the lack of a fullstop suggests the unending, heartfelt love. It is as if the speaker is whispering in a rising crescendo, i love. And then posing a rhetorical question, more like a self-reflection, "what more can i say"? Yes there is nothing more to say beyond that. Nothing to add. Nothing to seek. Nothing. Nothing more except I love.

Promising potential. Be encouraged and write more poems

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Answer 2

...the beginning reminded me of :
"Roses are red, violets are blue"

This is a good one...it rhymes better than the last one, but both have good rhythm.

It's easy to turn the good emotional displays you've written into a more typical style of poem, but I think they were worth reading, how they were.